I wrote this song and it was inspired by Stellar Kart. Please tell me if it is good.
Chorus:
Sadness breaks into my mind, it makes me feel like I should die, it's all because of you, it's all because of you.
Sadness drains into my soul, it makes me feel out of control, all because of you, all because of you.
Body:
God was there, when I called you're name and said I love you, he gave me strength, to carry on my empty life.He held me up when I felt like I shouldn't be here because you ripped my heart out and made me feel so alone. Alone, Alone, I felt so alone. He was there to guide me on a path of riteousness and now I know,that I will sometimes make mistakes but he will always love me like I once loved you.You were the one who told me that I wasn't right for anyone else.
Sadness breaks into my mind, it makes me feel like I should die, all bcause of you, just because :Dcaterrenina@hotmail.com of you.Repeat the body

Its good so make it longer, it needs to have the chorus at least repeat 3 times, maybe. 10/10 Rate Mine?, It stinks, because its my first song to write-

In Your Eyes

I want to change so bad.
I want to love everyone so bad.
But it's so hard.
I want to believe in you always.

(I have no idea what this is called but you repeat it before every chorus xD)

Maybe times are hard.
Maybe times are strange.
Or maybe it's just me.
Maybe it's just me...

(Chorus)
But In your eyes, I want to be something.
In your eyes, I want to be a faithful servant.
And In your eyes, I want to be growing in You.
And I want to be in the Body of Christ...And I am. And I will. And I want to...

I've doubted you, and I want to stop so bad..
I've sinned and I want to stop so bad..
So maybe this time I'll see the light.
I'll see the light in your eyes.

(chorus)

In my eyes. You are holy, You are perfect.
In my eyes...In Your Eyes...In everyone's eyes...In everyone's eyes...

Yeah its really long, but can you rate and maybe tell me what I should change or something..Thanks!