I was asking this girl to rate my song But I guess shes doesn't get on a lot...
Can you rate mine? I'll be happy to rate any other song you have writen. Thankies.

In Your Eyes

I want to change so bad.
I want to love everyone so bad.
But it's so hard.
I want to believe in you always.

(PRE-CHORUS!!!)

Maybe times are hard.
Maybe times are strange.
Or maybe it's just me.
Maybe it's just me...

(Chorus)
But In your eyes, I want to be something.
In your eyes, I want to be a faithful servant.
And In your eyes, I want to be growing in You.
And I want to be in the Body of Christ...And I am. And I will. And I want to...

I've doubted you, and I want to stop so bad..
I've sinned and I want to stop so bad..
So maybe this time I'll see the light.
I'll see the light in your eyes.

(chorus)

In my eyes. You are holy, You are perfect.
In my eyes...In Your Eyes...In everyone's eyes...In everyone's eyes...

WOW ITS THE END!

I guess tell me what I should change or something, it would help. Its my first song xD..Thanks!

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i think its koooool but i have no idea wat to suggest but then its kooool
ur awesome!

tis a very good song indeed!!
and i do believe the verse you song before every chorus is the pre-chorus or the chorus enrty or something like that if im not mistaken....

Thank you. Umm.So then whats a bridge? I can't figure it out. :P

the thing before a chorus is a so-called ''Prechorus''

a bridge is a verse that is different from the other veres.. it might have different chords/melody/rhyme scheme. it is often somewhere at the end of the song.. usually it's: verse/prechorus/chorus/verse/prechorus/chorus/instrumental thingy/bridge/prechorus/chorus/chorus. that's is a basic overview.. ofcourse u are free to change it or add something

xD Yeah well I thought there was some Techy kind of name. But Thanks.Yeah, you can tell its my first song. :d

awsome! totally cool!
only ur first song! 4 ur first one it's totally awsome!

It roxs.

I got to share this sermon I heard cuz it just rocks like ur song.

http://www.upperroomcommunity.org/audioFileDownload.php...io/2007/07-01-07.mp3

It's good. He talks about God using sinners to glorify him. Good news!!!

Rev, thanks! That makes me feel a lot more refeshed and I think I'll write another one.

Fron, I will look at that. I need some support about glorifying my Jesus. Thank you x10. It may help me write a new song.

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Originally posted by HawkRoxx:
Thank you. Umm.So then whats a bridge? I can't figure it out. :P

a bridge is a part of a song thats different than the rest.... like you'll be playing a slow rock type thing, then you switch to like pop rock lets say (relly bad i no but its all i can think of, im just learing to play this on piano myself) for a few lines or measures or whatever, and then it switches back to slow rock.....lol are you more confused than ever???
that's the best i could do....
hope it helps!!!!

I figured it out thanks. Im not gonna use a bridge though ^^.

lol
my description of a bridge prolly isn't the best so... yea sorry for confusing you more

Looks very well!
You're so better than me. xD
I cannot write one song without mistakes 'n boring senses!

i tried to write a song once
it didn't turn out so well
cuz i started it my own words and all (duh..) and it had the same sort of rythym as something on my mind by hn, so i started writing that down instead...... it was kind of strange...
lol
so now i stick to poems and short stories.... i only write poems when i have something on my mind thou....
ah! something on my mind!!! i have to listen that now.... where's my cd???

Mine sound like poems all the time n.n

mine always sound like poems too. i can never match a beat olr something with what i've written! idk why

well, when i just wrote the accidental song/poem (amazing i no!) when i reread it through, i got a certain melody to it, and i could kind of hear the piano notes i might use for it playing in the background really soft, like i was imagining them, you no? (and its not bc i was listning to Deathbed!!! i had paused it for a second, however hard that was, to read through it real quick )

Thats cool!

i feel like a noob bringin back a dead thread but whatever...your song is awesome!!!!!!!!!!! i always get upset when i post song lyrics and stuff and ask people to tell me what they think of it and then no one does, so even if this was on like the last page i would probably still post on it . but yeah, cool song. i can't really write stuff like that, i can only write rap. but i wish i could

What did you say? This isn't a dead thread I've been waiting for people to reply for awhile. But since the new forum, I haven't checked this one lately.